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I thought you loved me,
Guess you were just another one,
Thought there was still hope,
Thanks so much for proving me wrong,
I'm hearing you preaching,
Same old overplayed song,
Point out all my flaws,
But I don't see anything wrong,

You called me a monster,
You said I'm a monster,
You think I'm disgusting?
Look in the mirror,

All my life you thought you made me,
But behind my tears you couldn't change me,
No I won't ever let you break me,
I don't care if you think I need saving,
Because I'd rather be, I'd rather be a monster,
I'd rather be a monster than anything like you.

I thought you cared,
Would you look at that, I'm wrong again,
You just made me scared,
But I've grown so much since then,
And I don't like being a chess piece,
It's not my fault if you can't take that,
So please open up that door for me,
I'll walk out and I'm not turning back.

You called me a monster,
You said I'm a monster,
You think I'm disgusting?
Look in the mirror,

All my life you thought you made me,
But behind my tears you couldn't change me,
No I won't ever let you break me,
I don't care if you think I need saving,
Because I'd rather be, I'd rather be a monster,
I'd rather be a monster than anything like you.

I'm not so perfect,
But neither are you,
If being a freak's wrong,
Then I'm screwed, I'm screwed,
But take a look around you,
Fell be who's the stupid fool,
Because I'd rather be a monster,
I'd rather be a monster...

All my life you thought you made me,
But behind my tears you couldn't change me,
No I won't ever let you break me,
I don't care if you think I need saving,
Because I'd rather be, I'd rather be a monster,
I'd rather be, rather be, rather be,
I'd rather be a monster,
Than you.
Go away oh my gosh I don't go to Hot Topic anymore.
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is me and my relationship with my ex-boyfriend...it's the reason why we ended. :iconcryforeverplz:
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telestlees Featured By Owner May 13, 2012
I still really like this but I'll give you a critque so maybe it can help you out if you wish.
Just a comma thing...it seems like you don't need to have commas or periods in songs so you could easily eliminate that.
The repeat "you called me a monster/you said I'm a monster/you think I'm disgusting?/look in the mirror" is all cool but one little thing is the repeat on monster twice. It means the same thing and you don't have to have it like that.
It's just a real little thing, it's still great if you keep it.
The 5th line in the 4th stanza is neat but it doesn't seem to flow when I read it out loud. (just the words chess piece) Of course it could totally flow if you have sung it before or whatever but when reading it it doesn't seem to have much of a flow.
The overall meaning of this song is great and blunt. Anyone who doesn't understand poetry or deep meanings in anything could easily grasp this meaning. Which is perfect if you prefer this to be a pop song..like a catchy one.

I'd give this song about a 7.5 on a 1-10 scale.
It's great :)
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:iconremixedheartbeats:
RemixedHeartbeats Featured By Owner May 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I guess I've been taking a break from songwriting because of a lack of inspiration. But I will definitely keep this in mind because I think I'm probably gonna rewrite most of the songs I've posted.
Thanks again!
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:icontelestlees:
telestlees Featured By Owner May 13, 2012
You're welcome! Yeah, i've been taking breaks too. I normally write one song a week now..because of lack of inspiration.
Sounds cool
You're welcome again!
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tokiofalloutgirl Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011  Student Writer
I love this! :D
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RemixedHeartbeats Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. (:
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:icontokiofalloutgirl:
tokiofalloutgirl Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011  Student Writer
No problem! :D
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ambulances Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Student Writer
I really like this! It's heartfelt, I can tell- and I can empathize with it. :heart:
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RemixedHeartbeats Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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artist-inspired-66 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Student Writer
this sounds like me and my relationship with my grandmother... ya...
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